<![CDATA[CLEAR. CONCISE. ACCURATE. - Blog]]>Thu, 15 Oct 2026 10:02:21 -0700Weebly<![CDATA[Restrictive and Non-restrictive clauses 101.]]>Wed, 04 Feb 2026 19:19:04 GMThttps://www.scitechproofreading.com/blog/restrictive-and-non-restrictive-clauses-101
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What are restrictive and non-restrictive clauses?

You may remember from eighth grade grammar the terms restrictive and non-restrictive clauses, but do you remember what they are? The distinction between these two types of clauses seems to cause writers some trouble. Just ask Google! Here, I will give you a short lesson on these grammar tools and how to use them in your formal writing. Simply put, restrictive and non-restrictive clauses are relative clauses that add information to the noun of a sentence. The difference between them is that restrictive clauses restrict, or add necessary meaning, to the noun. Without the restrictive clause, the meaning of the sentence becomes unclear because the noun is no longer defined (i.e., restricted).
Below are example sentences from my graduate school research with and without a restrictive clause.

“The mitomycin C derivative that cross-links DNA is too unstable to isolate.”

When the clause after that is removed you get

“The mitomycin C derivative is too unstable to isolate.”

The second simple sentence may be accurate, but without context the reader can no longer be certain which derivative is being discussed. The definite article “the” signals that I am referring to a specific derivative, but the object is unclear without another sentence or the restrictive clause.

In contrast to the restrictive clause, which restricts the noun and gives necessary information to the meaning of the sentence, the non-restrictive clause does not restrict the noun and is not necessary for reader understanding. Below is an example with a non-restrictive clause.

“Mitomycin C, which is activated in situ by two-electron reduction to a reactive intermediate, is a non-specific anticancer prodrug.”

Notice that the non-restrictive clause gives information about the noun, but it doesn’t restrict the noun.

“Mitomycin C is a non-specific anti-cancer prodrug.”
The sentence has the same meaning, but with less information.


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Is it restrictive or non-restrictive?

In order to identify if a clause is restrictive or non-restrictive, use the following clues.

In American English commas and the relative pronoun used (that, which) signal if the clause is restrictive or non-restrictive. Notice above that in my example of a restrictive clause I used the relative pronoun that, and in the non-restrictive clause, I used “which”. Another signal of a non-restrictive clause is that it must be enclosed by commas.

The final test to determine if the clause is restrictive or non-restrictive is to remove the clause completely as I did above.

Does the noun become ambiguous to the reader? Could the sentence be misinterpreted? If the answer is “Yes”, add the clause back to avoid confusion.

Reasons to use restrictive and non-restrictive clauses

You may wonder “why should I bother using restrictive and non-restrictive clauses?” Be assured that your writing will improve if you add these tools to your academic writing toolbox. Incorporating restrictive and non-restrictive clauses into your writing has two benefits: it helps 1) retain your readers’ attention and 2) improves flow and style.

A string of short, simple sentences impedes the readers’ attention. Their choppiness distracts the reader from the meaning of the text. They also increase reader fatigue. The result is your text is harder to understand.

Above is an example of a series of short, simple sentences. Each sentence either contains information that is necessary to the meaning I’m trying to convey or improves context.  Below is what it would look like with restrictive and non-restrictive clauses.

A string of short, simple sentences, which makes the text choppy, distracts the reader from the meaning of the text and impedes the readers’ attention. Distractions that increase reader inattention and fatigue make your text harder to understand.

Although there are only 4 sentences in the simple-sentence example, it feels harder to read. Restrictive and non-restrictive clauses in the second example improve style and flow, resulting in easier reading. Notice that the clauses don’t disrupt the flow of the sentence, but they combine information from two or more sentences into one sentence that is comprehensive.
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Examples in science writing

Below are examples taken from my PhD thesis.

“The sensitivity of 18 and its derivatives to purification is a result of the electron density of the indole core, which increases the potential for heterolysis at C(1).”

Without the non-restrictive clause the text must be split into two sentences to convey the same information, resulting in a choppy construction.

“The sensitivity of 18 and its derivatives to purification is a result of the electron density of the indole core. It increases the potential for heterolysis at C(1).”

Here is an example with the restrictive clause. The restrictive clause provides the necessary information that only certain conditions were possible to explore.

“To further reduce the risk of C(10) heterolysis in the “real” system, conditions to remove the pyrrole carbinol that do not require an aqueous workup were investigated.”

“To further reduce the risk of C(10) heterolysis in the “real” system, conditions to remove the pyrrole carbinol were investigated.”

Without the restrictive clause, the meaning of the sentence is different. Key information is missing, which may mislead the reader.

Give it a try!

Writing is a skill that is learned through practice. When you edit your draft, try to use the restrictive and non-restrictive clauses to improve flow and reduce choppiness. Over time you’ll become proficient at using them to clearly convey your complex science.

I'd love to hear your thoughts. Reach out.
]]><![CDATA[Active or Passive Voice in science papers]]>Mon, 17 Feb 2025 20:42:02 GMThttps://www.scitechproofreading.com/blog/active-or-passive-voice-in-science-papersAs a STEM academic, you may not be familiar with the differences in passive and active voice writing styles. Here I describe their differences and when and where to use them to enhance your scientific paper.
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What are the active and passive voices?

According to CMOS, “Voice shows whether the subject acts (active voice) or is acted on (passive voice)—that is, whether the subject performs or receives the action of the verb.”

For example,
“She (subject) studied (verb) nitrogen-containing heterocycles for her dissertation research.” —Active
“Nitrogen-containing heterocycles (subject) were studied (verb) for her dissertation research.”—Passive

In the first example, the subject “her” is emphasized. The subject has acted (studied) on the direct object “nitrogen-containing heterocycles.” In the first example, I am telling a story about her (maybe this is for an author biosketch?). But in the second example, the subject is now “nitrogen-containing heterocycles,” and it is being acted on by “her.” This is the passive voice. The passive sentence is about the “nitrogen-containing heterocycles” not about the researcher.

Now that you know what the difference is between the two voices, you may be asking, “why you should I care?” Because you must advocate for your science, and you must tell the most impactful, clearest story you can in order to reach your target audience! Below, find out how the active and passive voices are used for clarity and impact.

Active or Passive voice in science papers?

Historically, science papers were written in the passive voice. This may seem odd because the passive voice is often considered inferior (CMOS) or weaker and more convoluted. According to “Writing Science” by Joshua Schimel and “The Craft of Research” by Booth, Colomb and Williams, the push to use passive voice stems from the belief that passive voice is less biased and more objective—both necessary in the sciences. But as Schimel states, how you analyze the data needs to be unbiased and objective, not how you write about it.

Incredibly, the argument of whether active voice is appropriate in science papers has been continuing for decades.[1,2,3] The current consensus from journal editors is that scientific articles should be written in the active voice, but the passive voice still has a place in scientific writing.[4]

Keep reading to find out how to use the active and passive voices in your science papers.

When to use the active voice

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The active voice should be reserved for the Introduction, Results/Discussion, and Conclusion sections of a paper. Due to the inherent complexity of science, these sections should be direct and clear for the most impact: active voice is usually more direct than passive voice.

In the introduction and conclusions section, you can give an appropriate background and summary of your research using active voice constructions such as
“Here, we describe…”
“We investigated…”
“In 2025, Smith et al. reported…”

As stated in “The Craft of Research”, in the Introduction, Results/Discussion and Conclusion sections, the authors are “entitled to suggest, prove, claim, argue, show, and so on.”

Here’s an example of a sentence you might find in the Conclusions section. “We optimized the reaction temperature, solvent, and additives to obtain the best yield of product.” The passive construction isn’t as impactful: “The reaction temperature, solvent, and additives were optimized to obtain the best yield of product.”

It’s important to note that repetitions of first-, second-, or third-person pronouns or names as the subject in every sentence become fatiguing. To retain your readers’ interest, vary the subject. Science writing doesn’t require that a “person” always be the subject that is performing an action. Other possible subjects can be tables, figures, reactions, experiments, and so on.

“Table 1 contains the reaction rate at multiple temperatures.”
“NMR spectroscopy helped elucidate the compound structure.”
“The material is unstable and it decomposes over time.”

When to use the passive voice

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It is generally agreed that the Methods section can be written in the passive voice because the passive voice shifts the emphasis from the “doer” to the object. The object (material, experiment, analysis of results) is now the “main character” of the section.

Why is the object the main character? Because the purpose of the Methods section is to 1) relate what was done and 2) provide repeatable steps so that others may replicate the study. Hence, the experiment, analysis, product, crystal, spectrum, and so on is more important than the “doer”. The authors are simply giving a neutral, necessary account of the events and outcomes of experiments that can and should be repeated. Thus, in this context, it is unnecessary to specify who did the experiments.

For example, “We heated the solution to 300 °C,” may be appropriate in the results section, where the authors are comparing their research to the literature or presenting it for the first time (i.e., “We did this and found this.”). Notice that the subject is the first word of the sentence. Usually the beginning of the sentence contains the most important information—when the reader is paying the most attention.

If we start the sentence with the object, it becomes passive: “The solution was heated to 300 °C”. This simple statement emphasizes the “solution” over the doer by placing the object first and using the passive voice.

Here’s another example, “The residue was vacuumed dried overnight in an oven, and the product was obtained in 85% yield.” In the Methods section, the science is more important than the researcher!

Use active and passive voice to be most effective

The active and passive voice should be used throughout your paper with most of the passive voice being in the Methods and most of the active voice being in the Introduction, Results/Discussion, and Conclusion sections. However, to retain your readers’ interest, you may need to occasionally mix the style. Varying sentence structure makes text more interesting. Interspersing the passive voice with the active voice, shifts perspective, manages the flow, and ultimately piques interest.

Here's a simple example.
“After determining that XX is the best catalyst for this transformation, we investigated the substrate scope. The substrates tested and respective yields of product are shown in Table X.”

I chose to write the second sentence in the passive voice because the “substrates” and “products” are the main character NOT the Table.

Where do you stand on this issue? Share your opinion by commenting.
  1. Hudson, R. The struggle with voice in scientific writing. J. Chem. Edu. https://doi.org/10.1021/ed400243b (2013)
  2. Leather, S. R. The case for the passive voice. Nature 381, 467 (1996).
  3. Pearlman, A. M. Passive voice. Nature 382, 108 (1996)
  4. Sainani, K., Elliott, C. Active versus passive voice in scientific writing. ACS Webinars. ACS. 2015 April 8. [2025 Feb. 15]. https://www.acs.org/acs-webinars/library/active-passive.html
]]><![CDATA[Introducing...the colon]]>Tue, 10 Dec 2024 18:37:52 GMThttps://www.scitechproofreading.com/blog/introducingthe-colon
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If you’ve ever had trouble using the colon in your text, you are not alone. I often encounter mistakes in colon use during copy editing and proofreading. This post contains information on how to properly use the colon to polish and clarify your writing.

Here I divide the job of the colon into two categories: formatting and introducing.
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Colon Use for Formatting

Most writers are familiar or confident when using the colon to format. Colon use for formatting can be dependent on your style guide or field, so make sure you always check the guide or field conventions. Here’s a list of how the colon is commonly used in formatting:
Time
  1. 3:45 pm (time of day)
  2. 04:25:02 (hrs:min:sec)
Ratios
  1. 1:1 (a one-to-one mixture)
  2. v:v (a volume-to-volume mixture)
Formal address
    Dear Dr Smith:
Books of the Bible
  1. Matthew 1:3
  2. Genesis 2:15
Below are examples of colon use in two different academic fields.

The American Medical Association uses the colon in references between the issue number and page numbers.
Author(s), Article title. Abbreviated Journal Name. Year;vol(issue No.):inclusive pages. DOI

The Council of Science Editors uses the colon in titles and subtitles (with the caveat that the period can also be used—check the style guide!)

Scientific  Style and Format: The CSE Manual for Authors, Editors, and Publishers

Always double check the conventions in your field when you use the colon for formatting!

Colon Use for Introducing Ideas

Like the semicolon and comma, the colon indicates a strong pause within the sentence. But unlike the semicolon and comma, where the pause indicates two closely related ideas, the colon introduces the information that follows. The best way to think of it is that the information after the pause illustrates, expands, or clarifies the statement before the colon. This is key to using the colon correctly in your writing. Once you effectively master colon usage, your writing will have more finesse and polish.
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Using the Colon to Introduce Lists

“We used three techniques to characterize the product: NMR spectroscopy, mass spectrometry, and elemental analysis.”

The above example has a complete independent clause before the colon; the list of items following the colon clarifies the idea by listing the techniques used. To check if this is correct, separate the information into more than one sentence.

“We used three techniques to characterize the product. They were NMR spectroscopy, mass spectrometry, and elemental analysis.”

Although both versions are correct, the colon can combine these sentences into one, thereby improving the flow of the text.

Here’s an incorrect version that has an incomplete clause before the colon, where a preposition is separated from its direct objects by a colon.

“We characterized the product by: NMR spectroscopy, mass spectrometry, and elemental analysis.”

If you check this with a period you get, “We characterized the product by.” This is an incomplete sentence! Wrong!

The use of colons to enumerate lists can be tricky when the words “including” and “the following” are used.

Incorrect: “We used multiple techniques to characterize the product, including: NMR spectroscopy, mass spectrometry, and elemental analysis.”

Correct: “We used multiple techniques to characterize the product, including NMR spectroscopy, mass spectrometry, and elemental analysis.”

The colon is not used when “including” is present even though it indicates a list to follow. But, the colon is used when “the following” or “as follows” is present.

“We characterized the product with the following techniques: NMR spectroscopy, mass spectrometry, and elemental analysis.”

The colon can also be used for lists that aren’t in-line with the text (as I showed above). The next time you need to present an in-line list, try using a colon!

Using Colons to Introduce Ideas

So far, I’ve given examples where I use a colon to introduce an in-line list or series to clarify the idea before the colon, but the colon can introduce a phrase, a complete sentence, a long quote, or, as in the sciences, equations.

“Pressure, volume, and temperature are related by the ideal gas law: PV = nRT”

“Einstein’s most famous equation relates energy, mass, and the speed of light:
E = mc2,
where E = energy, m = mass, and c is the speed of light.”

Notice that the punctuation in the dependent clause after the colon follows normal grammar rules.

Here’s an example where the colon introduces another sentence.

“The colon is a powerful punctuation mark: a variety of informative statements can be introduced by the colon.”

Rules Governing the Colon

Capitalization

Making the initial letter after the colon upper or lower case will ultimately be determined by the style guide you are using and conventions of your field, but here are some basic tips.

For items in a list, if the listed items are themselves complete sentences, use a capital letter after the colon and for each item. If the listed items are not complete sentences, make the initial letter lowercase. However, if there is only one sentence after the colon, you may need to keep the initial letter lowercase—check your style guide!

Commas, semicolons, periods, or numbers?

Items presented in an in-line list can be separated by commas, semicolons, or periods. Use periods for sentences; semicolons when the item has commas within it; and commas for non-sentences. Whichever you choose, the punctuation must be consistent within the list.

For displayed lists, semicolons and commas aren’t used between items. Periods are only used when the items themselves are sentences. Closing punctuation is not always required after the final item in a displayed list—again, check your style guide!

Numbers, enclosed by parentheses, may be used. This will depend on how you want to present the information. For example, if you are writing a grant application and a certain number of specific aims are required, you may want to number these aims in your list. Check the author guidelines!
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Learn to Use the Colon!

Just like any other skill, using the colon correctly in writing takes practice. When used correctly, the colon can improve the precision, clarity, and flow of your text.

How do you feel about using the colon? Leave a comment and we can chat!
]]><![CDATA[Did it? Does it? Will it? – Verb tense in scientific writing]]>Thu, 03 Oct 2024 15:56:55 GMThttps://www.scitechproofreading.com/blog/did-it-does-it-will-it-verb-tense-in-scientific-writing
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Have you ever had trouble choosing the correct verb tense for your research paper? If you answered “Yes”, read on to find out how to choose verb tense for impactful scientific writing.

Format of a scientific paper

Most scientific research papers follow the Introduction, Methods (Materials, Experimental), Results, and Discussion/Conclusion (IMRaD) format. Each section of the paper serves a distinct purpose.

Introduction: state of knowledge that led to hypothesis
Methods: procedures used to test hypothesis
Results: findings obtained by the experiments
Discussion: summary of decisive results and tentative conclusions

Because each section has a different purpose for the whole paper, it is common that the verb tense is different within each section and between sections.

Introduction

In the introduction, you must create context for the hypothesis or problem you are trying to solve by describing the current state of knowledge and background information. You do this by citing the relevant literature. When citing the literature, you should use the past tense and the present tense. Use the past tense to describe what was done in the research. Use the present tense to describe what was found in the research.

For example,
“Smith and Jones studied the stability of nitrogen-substituted aziridines. They found that these small nitrogen containing heterocycles are acid sensitive and open under acidic conditions.”

I used past tense to describe what they did in the study, but present tense when describing their results. The results are discussed in the present tense because they touch the present, that is, they remain true in the present (unless proved otherwise) and are current knowledge. Examples of this include characteristics, properties, and applications of materials; calculations with a specific tool and parameters; and techniques that improve a process.

In the last part of the introduction, the past, present, and even future, tenses can be used together.

“Here, we studied nitrogen-substituted aziridines to screen how nitrogen substitution changes the stability of the heterocycle under acidic conditions which will broaden its applications as an amine synthon.”

Methods/Materials/Experiments

Although this section may not be the most interesting to write, it is perhaps the easiest. Simply use the past tense in this section to describe what you did. All experiments for the paper were performed in the past. You or your colleagues did these experiments. Work may continue on this project with follow-up experiments, but for this paper, now, the experiments are finished. If a reviewer asks you to include more experimentation in the paper, you will still present it in the past tense in the final draft.

Remember, the procedures used to test your stated hypothesis or problem are always in the past relative to reporting and discussing the results.

“The reaction mixture was stirred at 100 °C for 10 h.” Simple past tense for the win!
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Results

The results section can use more than one tense, which often leads to confusion about what tense is most appropriate in specific situations.

Typically, figures and tables are referred to in the present tense:

“Figure 1 shows…”
“Table 1 contains the conditions screened…”

Although this may seem odd because the results were obtained in the past, your published paper is always read in the present. Even if the experiments were faulty and another paper shows that the results were wrong, or there is a retraction or correction, the figures in this iteration of the paper will always show these results.

However, it gets complicated when the results within the table or figure are discussed. You can choose either the present tense or the past tense.

“Figure 1 shows that as the reaction temperature decreased the reaction rate decreased.”

The past tense in the above sentence is correct. But the following can also be correct.

“Figure 1 shows that as the reaction temperature decreases the reaction rate decreases.”

So which one should you choose? Both are correct, but I prefer the present tense in this case. I try to keep in mind that under these specific conditions, anyone trying to repeat this experiment should expect the same results.

Thus, the result —obtained in the past by experimentation—touches and continues into the present (repeatable system or characteristic of the system) and is most appropriately discussed in the present tense. The is a specific tense for these types of situations called the progressive tense, but it isn’t needed here. For a more in-depth discussion of the progressive tenses see CMOS.

Here's another example, DFT calculations of this system, with this method will always give the same result.  

Discussion

Sometimes the discussion section is separate from the results, or it may be included within the results section. Either way, I think it makes the most sense for this material to be in the present tense. Think of these questions when writing the discussion.

How does the system act when probed this way?

What are the properties of the system (catalyst, molecule)?
  • What are your results?
  • What do the results mean?
  • What is their impact?
What if I use the past tense here?
  • What were your results?
  • What did the results mean?
  • What was their impact?
The past tense in the questions above give the sense that the knowledge you gained isn’t current. It’s already past. If the knowledge isn’t current then your audience wonder why they should care about your conclusions.
Remember that your conclusions and interpretations of the data are new. Put them in the present tense for the most powerful impact. For example,
“We ascribe the slower reaction rate to a lack of sufficient energy in the system.”

If the sentence is “We ascribed the slower reaction rate…”, a reader might ask, “So how did you fix it?”

Conclusions

As in the Introduction, Results, and Discussion, the conclusion section also needs to be written in more than one tense.

Use the past tense to summarize the study. “We studied the effects of substitution on aziridine stability.”

Use the present tense to summarize the results. “Substitution of the aziridine nitrogen changes its stability.”
“Here, we show…”
  • Materials have these properties and characteristics
  • The reaction behaves this way under these conditions
  • Our system solves this problem

Use the future tense to describe the results’ impact or meaning. “Our findings will broaden the use of aziridines as amine synthons.”

Still Unsure?

Scientific writing is challenging, even for a seasoned academic. When writing your research paper, remember what the intent of each sentence is and you’ll be able to easily chose the best verb tense.

Do you have trouble with verb tenses in scientific writing? Drop me a message on LinkedIn and we can chat about it.
]]><![CDATA[Jargon in science writing]]>Sat, 22 Jun 2024 18:30:05 GMThttps://www.scitechproofreading.com/blog/jargon-in-science-writing
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If you look up jargon under any style guide, you’ll either see the recommendation to avoid its use altogether or to use it with caution. Here you’ll find out why most writing authorities adamantly reject its use.

What is Jargon?

Jargon is technical vocabulary, or an informal idiom, that is field specific, meaning it is easily understood by people within that particular field. According to the Council of Science Editors Scientific Style and Format, jargon can be
  • Shortened forms of words from conversation that may enter formal communication
    • lab for laboratory
  • Ignored verb-object relations
    • “We stocked trout in the stream” instead of “We stocked the stream with trout”
  • Nouns that are not used with formal meaning
    • “No pathology was found…” instead of “No abnormalities were found…”
  • Euphemisms
    • “The patient expired” instead of “The patient died”
In STEM fields, jargon can appear often in informal conversation (like research-group meetings). At times, it can be quite useful because it relates very specific and precise information to those “in the know”. For example, when I was a graduate student, members of my research group often used the nouns TLC and NMR as verbs.

“I TLC’d the reaction to find out when it was finished.” or
“After workup, I NMR’d the crude mixture.”

These terms may have sounded odd to researchers outside of our group, but we knew exactly what was meant by TLC’d and NMR’d. Here’s what it could have been if jargon wasn’t used.

“I used thin-layer chromatography to find out when the reaction was finished.” and
“After work up, I performed a nuclear magnetic resonance experiment on the crude mixture.”

Notice how the spelled-out examples are more formal and longer: neither of which are necessary for conversation between peers.

Why should you avoid jargon in formal writing?

In the above example, the student’s use of TLC and NMR as verbs wasn’t a problem in the informal discussion within a group meeting. As noted in the Chicago Manuel of Style, English nouns are commonly used as verbs and often appear as jargon first. Our research advisor was very strict in removing this jargon from research papers and presentations.

Why?

Because jargon is precise to only some audiences, specifically audiences within your own field. Thus, jargon can limit the reach of your message!

Jargon may exclude
  • Researchers outside or new to the field
  • Multilingual authors
  • General audience
If you spell out the abbreviations in the above examples, they become problematic.

“I thin-layer chromatographied the reaction to find out when it was finished.”
“After workup, I nuclear magnetic resonanced the crude mixture.”

Neither of these uses would make sense to someone outside the field, and they could cause confusion for a multilingual scientist who knows what NMR and TLC are but isn’t familiar with these terms being used as verbs.
Furthermore, jargon can mean different things to different audiences.

For example, the term turnover number “is defined as the maximum number of molecules of substrate that an enzyme can convert to product per catalytic site per unit time” in enzymology. But in organometallic chemistry, the turnover number is the number of moles of substrate that a mole of catalyst can convert to product. Notice that the number of catalytic sites and time are not accounted for in the organometallic chemistry definition.

Here’s an example from Einsohn and Schwartz’s The Copyeditor’s Handbook: “Steep-learning curve” means learning easy information at a fast rate to some or learning difficult information (think walking up a hill) at a slow rate to others.

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Results of using jargon in formal communications

Ultimately, jargon can confuse and limit your audience. It makes your reader work harder to understand the message. In fact, the use of jargon in a paper title or abstract may reduce the number of the paper’s citations.

In a 2021 article, Martínez and Mammola found a significant negative relationship between the use of jargon in the title and abstract of 21,486 cave research articles and the number of citations the articles received. This finding likely applies to other fields.

Also, Jargon was found to disrupt fluency and to disengage the audience in a 2020 study in the Journal of language and Social Psychology. Here, study participants reported lower scientific interest in the study and perceived understanding of the topic.

Jargon: yea or nay?

Based on what I describe above, it is usually best to avoid jargon. Science and medical communication are already complex, and so it should be the writer’s goal to make the text as clear as possible, especially for a general audience.

But there are proponents of jargon use in STEM writing. Trevor Quirk, in “Writers should not fear jargon” an opinion piece for Nature, states that removing jargon eliminates important information. He gives the example of “photometry” and “spectroscopy”. Both are “methods of studying light”, but they are two distinct techniques.

Thus, in highly technical papers intended for a specific audience, jargon may have a place, but you must use jargon with care.

If you choose to use jargon, use it judiciously.  
Do you use jargon in your scientific writing? Drop a comment.
]]><![CDATA[Repetitive Strain Injury]]>Wed, 22 May 2024 15:41:04 GMThttps://www.scitechproofreading.com/blog/repetitive-strain-injury
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Why does my elbow still hurt?

I developed a repetitive strain injury in my elbow this past year. At first, I thought it was an injury from lifting; I decided to rest my arm and let it be. However, the pain got worse. I couldn’t grip things with my left hand; I couldn’t sleep without propping my arm on a pillow; I couldn’t put a jacket on without wincing. After 4 months of this pain, I finally decided to see my doctor. It took her less than 5 minutes to diagnosis the problem as tennis elbow, a type of repetitive strain injury. Since I don’t play tennis, I may never know what repetitive movement caused this injury (dishwashing, maybe?), but now I know how to recognize the signs and to reduce my risk.
Keep reading to find out more about repetitive strain injuries and how to reduce your risk of developing one from computer use.

What is Repetitive Strain Injury

Tennis elbow is a common name for a repetitive strain injury (RSI) known as lateral epicondylitis.  This is caused by overuse of the muscles and tendons located where bone and tendons join in the elbow. You may have heard of other RSIs, including golfer’s shoulder, carpal tunnel syndrome (median nerve compression), and stylus finger. These are all repetitive strain injuries that affect different parts of the upper extremities. As Johansson describes in his informative book What You Can Do About Carpal Tunnel Syndrome and Other Repetitive Strain Injuries (Contemporary Diseases and Disorders), RSIs are also known as
  • CTD - cumulative trauma disorder
  • RMD - repetitive motion disorder
  • MSD - musculoskeletal disorder
  • OOS - occupational overuse syndrome
  • WRULD - work-related upper limb disorder

The Cleveland Clinic gives a good overview of what RSIs are and how they develop. Briefly, they all stem from microinjuries in joints and ligaments that occur repeatedly during daily activities. The body doesn’t have time to heal these micro wounds because the injury keeps occurring (think typing). We are all at risk of RSIs because of the repetitive movements of jobs, sports, and other hobbies, including music!

The association between repetitive movements and work has been extensively studied and reviewed. RSIs are very costly to employers in the form of lost work hours and costly to employees due to pain, prolonged injury, and lost income. As described in a report from the Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, the best way to combat the problem of work-related RSIs is to implement work practices and environments that reduce the risk of developing these injuries. These practices include
  • Engineering controls (changing the layout of a workstation)
  • Administration controls (changing job rules or procedures)
  • Personal protective equipment (the jury is still out on whether braces are effective measures of prevention)

RSIs at the desk

Extended computer use is a well-known risk factor for developing an RSI. A recent literature review states that more than 50% of computer users experience some form of MSD, with the most common areas affected being the back, neck and shoulder. Unfortunately, if you’re a writer, editor, or administrator (and many others), your job probably involves extended computer use and sitting for long periods. So what can we do?
Doctor is hold a sheet of paper while listening to a patient. Patient is holding wrapped hand by wrist to show doctor.

How to reduce the risk of RSIs in editing and writing

In a 2005 in-depth review on MSDs and computer work, Wahlström cites studies on the association between computer work-related injuries and muscular load, postures and movements, and force.  To reduce work-related—including computer work—risk of RSIs, the field of ergonomics emerged. Ergonomics entails modifying a work environment to reduce the repetitive motions or postures that increase the risk of RSIs. As I stated above, this is a type of engineering control: modifications of the types and setup of chairs, desks, keyboards, and monitors can help reduce the risk. Dygma gives a great summary of how to ergonomically set up your work station in their How to Prevent RSI with an Ergonomic Setup article.

Here is another good article with 10 suggestions for preventing RSIs.

Aside from an ergonomically setup workstation (discussed above), you should take breaks from your desk (at least every hour), use good posture and support your back and arms, and reduce the amount of keyboard use.
Illustration of a bearded man looking at his computer screen. His correct body posture and seat height are highligthed by green dashed lines. Check marks show that his chair, head, feet, and monitor are ergonomically positioned.

Tools to reduce mouse and keyboard use

So how does an editor or writer reduce keyboard and mouse use. In my experience, my job is typing and mouse work! Each keystroke requires pressure from a finger. And if you add up all the keystrokes over 8 hours of computer work, that’s a lot of pressure. For an interesting and high-level discussion on the pressure of typing, check out this post on keyboard switch forces.

To reduce the number of keystrokes and mouse movements throughout the day, you can try the following:
  • Macros
  • Shortcut keys
  • Text expander

Macros

Macros are little computer programs that automate repetitive tasks. Paul Beverley has an outstanding list of macros that are free to download and use. He also has YouTube videos about how to use macros in writing and editing.  

Do you need to make a list of all the hyperlinks in a document? There’s a macro.

Do you need to find the next highlighted item? There’s a macro.

Do you need to remove all highlights and/or text colors? Yes! There’s a macro.

Check out my previous post on Macros to find out how I use these wrist-saving tools!

Shortcut keys

Another way to reduce the number of keystrokes (and mouse use) is to use shortcut keys. Google shortcut keys to find lists of the shortcuts that are already within your writing software. Here’s just a few of the ones I use regularly.
  • Crtl+V – paste
  • Crtl+S – save
  • Crtl+home (end) – go to the start (or end) of the document
And so on!

You can also set your own shortcut keys. And yes, you can assign shortcut keys to macros! (I highly recommend this for macros you use while editing: “InstantJumpUp”, “HighlightFindDown”, “GoogleFetch”, etc.)

To customize shortcut keys, go to your ribbon and right click. Click on “Customize the ribbon…”. Click on “Keyboard shortcuts: Customize” from there you can assign any combination of keys to many different commands. Have fun!

Text Expander

Text expanders are tools that allow you to automate repetitive typing. They use snippets, which are shortcut phrases that insert long phrases, sentences, and blocks of text. Check out this post for a comprehensive guide to text expanders.

When I’m editing, I often leave the comment “Please ensure that my change doesn’t alter your intended meaning.” That’s a 10-word sentence that I type in almost every comment bubble. If I used the snippet, pec, then the text expander would automatically insert the full sentence.

This saves time and pressure on my fingers and wrists.

Awareness is key!

RSI is a serious injury that we may all be at risk of developing. With a few changes in habits and useful tools, we can reduce our risk of this costly disease. Do you have tricks for reducing the risk of RSIs? I’d love to hear from you.
]]><![CDATA[En dash faux pas? Correctly using the en dash in science writing.]]>Wed, 01 May 2024 23:42:49 GMThttps://www.scitechproofreading.com/blog/en-dash-faux-pas-correctly-using-the-en-dash-in-science-writing
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As a copy editor, one of the most common punctuation mistakes I encounter in STEM writing is the use of a hyphen when an en dash is needed. Do you know how to correctly use the en dash in scientific writing? Read on to learn how and when to use this misunderstood punctuation mark.
Grid with pink background that has two columns. The first column shows the hyphen, en dash, minus sign, em dash, tilde and solidus. The second column has the names of the punctuation.

What is an en dash?

Can you pick out the en dash from the picture? Here’s a hint: longer than a hyphen, but shorter than the em dash.  And not to be confused with the minus sign. Common knowledge says that the en dash is so named because it is the approximate width of “N”. However, the name origin is more complicated. As described by Matthew Butterick in hyphens and dashes, “em and en refer to units of typographic measurement, not to the letters M and N.”

According to the Chicago Manual of Style (CMOS), the authoritative style guide for writers and editors that I describe here,
"Hyphens and the various dashes all have their specific appearance…and uses…. The hyphen, the en dash, and the em dash are the most commonly used. Though the differences can sometimes be subtle—especially in the case of an en dash versus a hyphen—correct use of the different types is a sign of editorial precision and care."

In UK English style the en dash with space before and after replaces the em dash, but this use of the en dash won’t be discussed further because it is atypical in US English style.

How to us the en dash in science writing?

Recently, when I wanted to reviewing the rules on en dash usage in science writing, I grabbed my copy of the “Best Punctuation Book, Period” by June Casagrande. I love this book. It is very readable and easily searchable. Casagrande has a section for each punctuation mark, which includes a Punctuation Panel’s, made up of professional copy editors in news media and book publishing, preferred usage of the mark. As expected, the chapter on the en dash is quite short. However, I did a double take when I read, “The en dash…applies solely to book style. It does not exist in news, science, or academic style.” WRONG!
The en dash has very specific uses in STEM writing.
The en dash is used to
  • improve clarity of compound adjectives
  • indicate equal contribution
  • indicate numerical ranges
  • indicate chemical bonds

Use in compound adjectives

Both CMOS and the American Medical Association (AMA) Manual of Style 11th edition prescribe use of the en dash when the compound adjective has an open element or already-hyphenated element. This helps avoid ambiguity.

For example:
From CMOS, Chuck Berry–style lyrics (here, the name “Chuck Berry” is a known open unit, but it is a compound adjective with “style”)

From the AMA, non–English-language journals

Indicates equal weight

When a compound adjective has two components that have equal weight, the en dash is used. The American Chemical Society (ACS) and the American Psychological Association both describe this usage, known as the peer en dash. This includes collaborators of scientific findings or joint authorships.
Here are examples.
  • Diels–Alder reaction
  • Beer–Lamber law
  • Test–retest reliability
  • Structure–activity relationship

Numerical ranges

Another use of the en dash is to indicate inclusive numerical ranges (no spaces before or after the en dash). Use it for dates, times, data, and so on.

“The graph shows the mean of the data from multiple biological replicates (n = 3–6).”

However, don’t use the en dash when “from” precedes the range—the word “to” is used instead.

“Participation in the study was measured from May 2010 to April 2012.”

Furthermore, if one of the numbers is negative, then the en dash should not be used.

“Over the last week, temperatures were −10 to 23 °F.” Not “−10–23 °F”.

Follow your style guide of choice to determine if units need to be repeated within numerical ranges. Of note, the AMA style guide 11th edition uses hyphens for numerical ranges. WEIRD!

Chemical Bonds

Perhaps my favorite use of the en dash is in the chemical bond as prescribed by ACS. This is near and dear to my heart as I spent 6+ years working in chemistry and chemical biology. Here the en dash indicates a single covalent sigma bond.

H3C–OH
R2C–C(H)=O

Notice that the equal sign (same width as the en dash) denotes a double covalent pi bond.

Yes to the en dash!

The en dash has specific uses in science, and it’s important for clarity, formality, and professionalism to understand the different uses. Although CMOS recommends using other punctuation instead of the en dash or completely recasting the sentence, I suggest using the en dash without reservation. What do you think?
]]><![CDATA[Research paper graphics as storyboards in STEM!]]>Fri, 22 Mar 2024 23:00:00 GMThttps://www.scitechproofreading.com/blog/research-paper-graphics-as-storyboards-in-stemIf you don’t know how to start writing your research paper, you are not alone. According to the Berkeley Student learning Center Before You Start Writing That Paper guide, “all writers face the dilemma of looking at a blank computer screen….” Staring at a blank page can be daunting even when all the data is analyzed and the outcomes of the research are known. Google search “writers’ block” or “start writing”, and you’ll find thousands and thousands of hits about cures and strategies to overcome this common challenge.

So, what is the answer to writers’ block in STEM writing? Storyboards! Here, I describe how to use graphics (figures, tables, schemes) to storyboard for your research paper.

What are storyboards?

Photograph of storyboard using graphics and visuals.
As defined by the Nashville Film Institute, storyboards are graphical representations of a story’s step-by-step progress. Storyboards have been in use since the 1930s in the film industry. As described, storyboards help
  • organize thoughts
  • share ideas
  • identify problems
  • improve planning
Finally, breaking the story into sections simplifies working out the details of that section.
Storyboarding for STEM research is not new. Check out this YouTube video on three different text methods to storyboard for science writing from the University of Guelph’s Writing in the Sciences (WITS) project. According to WITS, science writing storyboards are specifically used to
  • identify scenes (paragraphs)
  • identify the message of each scene
  • ensure a logical flow of scenes
Based on my experience, research paper graphics are great storyboards for research papers. Below you will learn how to use graphics to storyboard for your next research paper!

Identify the scenes.

28 different types of charts
When I was in graduate school and about to write my first paper, my research advisor gave me this advice, “Make the graphics first.”
If you haven’t already done so, you need to compile and analyze the data from your research. Overall, graphics should be concise, meaningful, and easy for your audience to understand.
Graphics include
  • Tables
  • Schemes
  • Figures
  • Photographs
  • Charts and graphs
As extensively described in The Craft of Research by Booth, Colomb and Williams, the main claims of a research project must be supported by evidence, which lead to subclaims that, in turn, also must be supported by evidence. Thus, your graphics should clearly present the data to either support or reject the research hypothesis. Try to visualize the data in different formats; it may take time to find the best visual presentation, but as stated by Booth, Colomb and Williams, displaying the data in multiple ways may help elucidate relationships that weren’t first apparent.

Generating the graphics doesn’t have to be a formidable challenge, it may be straightforward or even fun. Because my project was a synthesis, my schemes depicted the path from starting materials to products, with intermediates along the way. But for other papers, I needed to analyze data and use charts and graphs to understand the information and present it well.

Identify the message.

While you make the graphics, mentally describe them—or take notes. This step is like making an outline: the graphic is the heading and each heading should have multiple points of discussion. By the time you finish the graphics, you should be able to communicate the type of data presented by the figure, how the data was collected, how the data could be interpreted, and how it is relevant to the main research claim. This is the message (points) of the storyboard (outline).

Logical flow of scenes to tell the story.

Flow chart shows connections between graphics.
After organizing the research outcomes into clear and concise graphics, the graphics must be arranged to ensure a logical flow of the information, that is, a compelling story. By arranging and rearranging the order of the graphics—before any text is written—you can determine how the graphics are related and how to transition from one graphic to the next. Take time with this step. You may discover that a graphic doesn’t contribute to the current story but should still be reported in the supplementary information. Most importantly, it should be clear if more evidence is needed to support your claim or if there is missing information that needs to be addressed.

Filling in the details and drafting the paper.

Now it’s time to fill in the details. Once the graphics are in a logical order, start writing about the graphic using the points you already compiled. What type of data was collected for the graphic and why? What does the graphic show? Does it support or reject the claim? Did the data in this graphic lead to more questions that substantiated collecting more data? And so on.

Because the order of the graphics has been extensively explored to enhance logic and flow, transitioning from one to the other should be easy.

Finally, the story that has unfolded from your data-derived visuals will determine what is included in the introduction and concluding sections.

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]]><![CDATA[Is a CMOS Subscription worth the cost? A breakdown of the benefits.]]>Tue, 13 Feb 2024 18:30:00 GMThttps://www.scitechproofreading.com/blog/is-a-cmos-subscription-worth-the-cost-a-breakdown-of-the-benefits
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Whether you're a new writer struggling with sentence structure and grammar or an experienced writer who wants to ensure they get every point across clearly, a style guide is the answer.
 
But not every style guide is created equal. For most writers, there’s one that I recommend above all others—The Chicago Manual of Style (CMOS). Read on to learn how it was developed, why it will strengthen your writing, and the benefits of an online subscription over a hard copy edition of the text.

What is CMOS?

According to its website, The Chicago Manual of Style is “the venerable, time-tested guide to style, usage, and grammar. . . .  It is the indispensable reference for writers, editors, proofreaders, indexers, copywriters, designers, and publishers, informing the editorial canon with sound, definitive advice.”
 
The University of Chicago Press introduced the style guide in 1891 as "The University Press style book and style sheet." Initially, it was used as a style sheet, or common set of rules, to correct inconsistencies and find typographical mistakes across the university press.
 
The 12th edition (1969), complied by Catherine Seybold (1925–2008) and Bruce Young (1917–2004), was a revision that solidified the position of CMOS as the industry leader on style matters. It is now in its 17th edition, with over 1,000 pages in the print edition and over 2000 hyperlinked and cross-referenced paragraphs. It is the authoritative style guide for fiction and non-fiction books and popular magazine articles.
CMOS Home page

Why is CMOS important to a science writer?

If it’s the authoritative style guides for books and magazines, why does it matter to a science writer? Different scientific fields or publishers, such as the American Chemical Society, the American Institute of Physics, and the American Medical Association, have different style guidelines. Yet many of these field-specific style guides are based on CMOS (check out the subscriber testimonial from the American Meteorological Society), even if they disagree about comma placement or hyphenation rules. You’ll find that the fundamentals of grammar and writing, such as sentence structure and sentence parts, remain the same across them all. Notably, there is even a scientific companion to CMOS, Scientific Style and Format, that was developed by the Council of Science Editors to be an indispensable guide to science writers.

No matter your scientific discipline, you need to understand fundamental guidelines and conventions to share your message logically and persuasively. Within "Part II: Style and Usage," CMOS has extensive chapters explaining grammar fundamentals and the role of punctuation. This section is an invaluable resource when learning to write effectively in any scientific field.

How do I use CMOS Online?

Because the hard copy of CMOS is over 1,000 pages (yikes!), I recommend getting an online subscription. Although some prefer to read the hard copy, which feels good in the hand, with an online subscription, you can

Keyword search the entire contents of CMOS

CMOS Online is easily keyword searchable; every topic is cross-referenced to related content. For example, if you are looking for the usage of conjunctive adverbs, a quick search for "adverbs" will also populate "adverbial conjunctions."
You can now get the definition, examples of use, and related content such as "Beginning a sentence with a conjunction." I have bookmarked many of my searches to quickly find the relevant articles by perusing the CMOS table of contents. The ability to bookmark frequent searches is just one of the many benefits of investing in a CMOS Online subscription.
CMOS table of contents with book marks

Submit a question to the Chicago Style Q&A

If you can’t find an answer to a style question, CMOS Online has a robust Q&A section. You can submit a question, browse questions, and get alerts. Members of the manuscript editing department answer questions regarding CMOS conventions not found in the style guide or a dictionary.
You can check out the answer to this question from the Latest Q&A page:

Can you please add “wise” to the hyphenation table? I’m curious if you would use a hyphen in a sentence like “Accessibility-wise, my favorite city was Tokyo.”

Access the online Users' Forum

Although, questions and answers are accessible by anyone, the user’s forum is specifically for subscribers. The forum is organized by category (i.e., copy-editing, business), then topic (punctuation, tables and illustrations), then threads and posts. Here you can reach out to others who may have the same problem you’re struggling with. 

Access common-problem guides

Two important guides, the “Hyphenation” and the “Good usage versus common usage” guides, are readily available. These are invaluable to writers, even writers of scientific journal articles! Sometimes, you'll wonder, "Do I hyphenate this word with an -ly ending?" or "Should I be using the word ‘effect’ or ‘affect’?"

In these cases, you’ll be so glad to have access to the CMOS guides. After consulting one, you can confidently write: 

 “We did affect the reaction by including 2 equiv. of the additive, as indicated by the color change, but we could not determine the effect of the additive on the reaction by NMR because the additive is paramagnetic.”

Access blog posts and quizzes

If you’re a self-proclaimed grammar nerd like me or just curious about your grammar skills, you can access grammar quizzes. For example, the Chicago Style Workout 76 covers grammar standards from chapter 5. The workouts are quick, and you get the results and reference paragraphs immediately.

You’ll also find the blog CMOS Shop Talk, which reviews the if’s, when’s, why’s, and how’s of CMOS style conventions.

Is CMOS Online worth the cost of subscription?

As a solopreneur with limited resources, I carefully consider every resource I purchase.

CMOS Online is one of the first resources I bought for my copy-editing business, and it’s been an incredible investment. It is my go-to resource for general usage and style conventions; I cannot edit without it. 
 
Have I convinced you that CMOS Online is worth the subscription price? Do you have more questions about CMOS? Tell me in the comments!
]]><![CDATA[How to Use Semicolons, One of Grammar's Most Misunderstood Marks]]>Mon, 22 Jan 2024 21:30:00 GMThttps://www.scitechproofreading.com/blog/how-to-use-semicolons-one-of-grammars-most-misunderstood-marks
Have you ever almost used a semicolon, but abandoned the idea for fear of doing it wrong?

Or do you avoid semicolons because you worry they make your writing seem too stuffy?
If so, you aren’t alone.

Throughout modern history, semicolons have been one of the most misunderstood and polarizing punctuation marks in existence. For this reason, many writers shy away from using them altogether.

There are strong opinions about the semicolon’s use. Some writers and editors believe it makes things too choppy. Others believe a comma and coordinating conjunction do the same job. Still others fear it makes their writing seem elitist.

In this post, I’m coming to the defense of the semicolon. Get ready to learn more about what it is, how it is used, and why as an editor I use it often in my work.

What is a semicolon?

Semicolon punctuation mark
According to Amy Einsohn’s and Marilyn Schwartz’s authoritative text The Copyeditor’s Handbook, the semicolon can act as a strong comma or a weak period.

How are semicolons used?

Most style manuals agree that the semicolon has three jobs:

1. To join two related independent clauses without using coordinating conjunctions
2. To precede a conjunctive adverb when linking independent clauses
3. To separate complicated items in lists where commas are already used.

Semicolons can also be used to delineate items in references, but since reference formatting is not text writing, we won’t give into that here. However, if you’d like to learn more the University of Pittsburg Library system has a fantastic resource.

Let’s break down each of those three uses with some examples.

Using semicolons to directly join two related independent clauses

An independent clause is a clause that contains a subject and predicate that can stand alone, that is, it’s a complete sentence. Two related independent clauses have a logical connection to each other. With commas, a coordinating conjunction (“and”, “but”, “yet”) is needed to join two independent clauses. The short pause of the comma and the coordinating conjunction confirm that these ideas are related, but the comma may seem too hurried or trivializing. The long pause of a period may separate the ideas too much, thereby undermining some of the logical connection. The semicolon provides a middle ground for the pause—still evidencing the connection but allowing more space.

Using semicolons before conjunctive adverbs when linking independent clauses

Semicolons are also required when conjunctive adverbs (“however”, “therefore”, “indeed”, etc.) are used to combine two independent clauses. Adverbs qualify and describe verbs, adjectives, other adverbs, and even sentences. If one independent clause emphasizes or scrutinizes another independent clause, a conjunctive adverb preceded by a semicolon can be used to show this relationship between the clauses.

For example: “We aimed to create ideal conditions for the desired reaction; however, we still identified by-products in the batch.”

Here, “however” emphasizes that we did our best to optimize and understand the reaction conditions. The substitution of “however” with “but” would emphasize the subsequent clause more.

Separating items containing commas

If you list a series of items and one or more of the items has a comma, separating those items with commas may confuse your reader. Thus, a semicolon is warranted in this situation to separate the parts of the list.

“I’ve lived in Baltimore, Md; Tampa, Fl; and San Antonio, Tx.” Here a comma is conventionally used between the city and state so a semicolon should be used for clarity.

“We optimized the reaction’s reagents; additives, bases to act as hydrogen ion scavengers; duration; and temperature.” I specify the type of additive and its function. But the meaning would be different if commas were used: “We optimized the reaction’s reagents, additives, bases to act as hydrogen ion scavengers, duration, and temperature.” This suggests that additives and bases were needed.  

Semicolons: Misunderstood and Undervalued

The jobs of a semicolon are straightforward. Still there are many people who find them frivolous or worse:

“If you have to use a semicolon, you didn’t write the sentence well enough,”—Personal communication.

“All they do is show you’ve been to college,”—Kurt Vonnegut Jr.

“They are more powerful more imposing more pretentious than a comma but they are a comma all the same. They really have within them deeply within them fundamentally within them the comma nature,” —Gertrude Stein.

One argument against the semicolon is that a comma or period can do the same thing. Furthermore, because it gives a slightly longer pause than a comma, it may seem too strong or abrupt in some contexts. On the other hand, it is a shorter pause than a period and may seem too weak.

In Defense of the Semicolon

,Personally, I think the semicolon has a place in a writer’s toolbox.

First, a semicolon can quickly fix comma splices, where two related—but independent—ideas have been joined with a comma. A semicolon can be swapped for that comma, making the sentence grammatically correct and retaining the intended pause and relationship.

Second, and perhaps more importantly, semicolons help vary sentence length. As discussed in The Copyeditor’s Handbook, a writer can control the audience’s attention by varying sentence length. Too many short independent clauses ending in a period can give the writing a choppy feel. This choppiness leads to reader fatigue. In contrast, sentences that are too long can be confusing and unclear, leading to disinterest; therefore, intentional use of the semicolon helps retain the reader’s interest.

Semicolon advocate Arthur Plotnik asserts in his book Spunk & Bite, “With a semicolon, there is a split-second of tease. . . . Semicolons inject expectation into sentences, and in literature expectancy is a good thing; it creates subliminal tension followed by release: the quiet ah’ of art.”

Here is an example Plotkin’s idea in action.

Take this sentence:
“It was a dark and gloomy morning, and the houses almost disappeared as I walked past.”
Although the sentence is technically correct, it lacks tension. But if we edit it to read as follows, much changes: “It was a dark and gloomy morning; the houses almost disappeared as I walked past.”

The semicolon adds tension and begs the question, “where were you going?”.

It's Time to Embrace the Semicolon

Whether you are a new writer or a seasoned one, it’s time to embrace the semicolon and use it to strengthen your writing.

Remember, semicolons can
1. provide longer pauses than commas and shorter pauses than periods
2. delineate relationships between related independent clauses
3. separate items in a complex list
4. add tension and interest to the text

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